Scene 43--Before and After

As scene 43 begins, Michael and Mimi have begun trying in earnest to undo the damage they have done to their sex life and their marriage. Here is the original version of the scene.



43  INT. COTTAGE LIVING ROOM - EVENING                  43

    Michael and Mimi lie entwined on the couch, each in an odd 
    state of semi-dress from having random articles of clothing 
    removed and half-removed.  Mimi lies across Michael, and 
    the two are kissing gently.

                          MIMI
              How do you feel?

                          MICHAEL
              I'm a little nervous, actually.

    A close observer might see a shadow pass across Mimi's face 
    when she hears this, but whatever discomfort she feels is 
    pretty well hidden.

                          MIMI
              So am I.

    She gives Michael a little kiss.

                          MIMI
                   (cont.)
              I wonder if it would help us to get 
              drunk.

                          MICHAEL
                   (laughing a little)
              I don't know.  It's a thought.

                          MIMI
              Maybe tomorrow we can go out and get 
              some wine.

                          MICHAEL
              Sure.

    More small kisses.

                          MIMI
              Let's just relax, and do little 
              things with each other.

    Mimi starts kissing and licking Michael's chest, slowly and 
    sensually.  Between kisses she talks.

                          MIMI
                   (cont.)
              You know what I'd really like?

                          MICHAEL
              What?

                          MIMI
              Only if you're in the mood.

                          MICHAEL
              Uh-huh.

                          MIMI
              I'd enjoy it if you went down on me.  
              Do you feel like doing that?

                          MICHAEL
              Uh-huh.

    The two start shifting positions so that Michael can give 
    Mimi head.  They cooperate to remove whatever articles of 
    clothing stand in the way.

                          MIMI
              I don't need to come.  I just want 
              to enjoy the feeling.

    Michael puts his head between Mimi's legs.  She starts to 
    make little, relaxed noises.

                          MIMI
                   (cont.)
              A little more gently, darling.

                          MICHAEL
              Okay.

                          MIMI
              You can be a little less direct at 
              first, if you want.

                          MICHAEL
              Okay.

                          MIMI
              Is it all right for me to make 
              suggestions like that?

                          MICHAEL
              Sure.

    Michael resumes.  There is a pause.

                          MIMI
              That feels good.

    She seems to be enjoying herself.



If anyone can figure out a way to shoot that scene without getting unintentional laughs, please write me E-mail at sallitt@easyway.net and tell me how.

Here is the revised version of the scene.


43  INT. COTTAGE LIVING ROOM - EVENING                  43

    Michael and Mimi lie entwined on the couch, each in an odd 
    state of semi-dress from having random articles of clothing 
    removed and half-removed.  Mimi lies across Michael, and 
    the two are kissing gently.

                          MIMI
              How do you feel?

                          MICHAEL
              I'm a little nervous, actually.

    A close observer might see a shadow pass across Mimi's face 
    when she hears this, but whatever discomfort she feels is 
    pretty well hidden.

                          MIMI
              So am I.

    She gives Michael a little kiss.

                          MIMI
                   (cont.)
              I wonder if it would help us to get 
              drunk.

                          MICHAEL
                   (laughing a little)
              I don't know.  It's a thought.

                          MIMI
              Maybe tomorrow we can go out and get 
              some wine.

                          MICHAEL
              Sure.

    More small kisses.

                          MIMI
              Let's just relax, and do little 
              things with each other.

    Mimi starts kissing and licking Michael's chest, slowly and 
    sensually.  Between kisses she talks.

                          MIMI
                   (cont.)
              You know what I'd really like?

                          MICHAEL
              What?

                          MIMI
              Only if you're in the mood.

                          MICHAEL
              Uh-huh.

                          MIMI
              I'd enjoy it if you went down on me.  
              Do you feel like doing that?

                          MICHAEL
              Uh-huh.

    The two start shifting positions so that Michael can give 
    Mimi head.  They cooperate to remove whatever articles of 
    clothing stand in the way.

                          MIMI
              I don't need to come.  I just want 
              to enjoy the feeling.

    Michael moves down to between Mimi's legs.

                          MIMI
                   (cont.)
              Be gentle.  Not too hard.

    She is relaxed, low-key.

                          MIMI
              That feels good.

    She seems to be enjoying herself.

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